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Composition... and a few other things

You're composition is lacking immensely, it is very confusing, and is all over the place. If you want to see a good example of fantastic composition (and detail), look up Frank Frazetta. You seem to pay attention to detail, but lack proper hierarchy and decent posing.

It feels wonky, and slapped together. Take time to plan it out some more, and practice the poses before jumping into it. It's also nice to see you're putting understanding of anatomy into your work, but it's making the poses here stiff. The characters lack any definitive life, and some lack proper proportions.

One thing I'd like you to try is to black out all of the character one by one, and ask yourself if the pose is readable. Meaning, does the pose sell the attitude/emotion/action/etc. of that character.

I hope this helps.

msg2007 responds:

ok dude your the better artist
thanks for the review

*slams palm into forehead*

Now I see you've got great attention to detail in clothes and such, but... my goodness the twinning! Why?!

Twinning: meaning the limbs are copying the other limbs, this kills any depth to a drawing. I know he is running, but you couldn't have made it more dynamic? I would prefer a sketchy attempt at being dynamic, then a finalized yet detailed twinning pose.

You're compostion is also quite horrible, I believe you should've chosen another angle. Since you're hiding the face of the Vault Dweller (I'm a fan of the series, so I like seeing that someone else liked the older games) you should've put more emfacice on showing the back of the Vault dweller with the mutie above. Making us behind the Vault dweller running towards the down SM, while he takes an attempted shot at the VD.

Get what I mean?

I do truly hope that this helps.

LiftYourSkinnyFists responds:

Thanks for the response. Keep in mind that this was just a random doodle from my sketchbook, I wasn't trying to make a piece of art. i wasn't thinking about composition or anything like that. I don't really understand your twinning comment though. Limbs are copying the other limbs?? I thought the pose was pretty dynamic.

Hmm...

One thing I suggest you do, is to flip your drawings to help give you your own critique.

The arms are definitely a problem here. The right is too big and stiff, while the left is quite long and rubbery.

The pose itself is quite plain, stiff, and lifeless. It's seems to jumped in on finalizing what you had too early, take your time and step back to get a better analysis.

Another thing, if this is a futuristic soldier there should be more to his uniform. I wouldn't look at him as a soldier, rather as a rebel of sorts.

Another member who intends to post fantastic animations on Newgrounds... soon enough :D

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